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Post by psychotic pretender » Wed Jan 02, 2008 7:13 pm

Pick my heart up gently
Like its made of glass
Sit down slowly
Unfold the past
Show my true colors
Does my blood run red
Your touching me
Enough said
Yet still you delve
Into my secret truth
No boundaries known
Gaze at my youth
Watch me triumph
See me fall
Hear my desires
Embrace them all
Shed light on my pain
Heal a wound
Fall to your knees
Bring about my doom
Pick my heart up gently
It is made of glass
Sit down slowly
don’t shatter my past
/My first thought was, he lied in every word,
That hoary cripple, with malicious eye
....
......................................
...... And yet
Dauntless the slug-horn to my lips I set,
And blew. ``Childe Roland to the Dark Tower came.''

Childe Roland to the Dark Tower Came

Robert Browning 1812-1889

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Re: untitled

Post by Moushka » Wed Jul 16, 2008 5:12 pm

Nice.......If there was a title I would say "Trust Unfolded" or something....lots of trust in this.......
1.Believe 2.Belong 3.Become
1.Awareness 2.Acceptance 3.Action

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Post by psychotic pretender » Mon Nov 03, 2008 6:46 pm

thanks much

glad you enjoyed
/My first thought was, he lied in every word,
That hoary cripple, with malicious eye
....
......................................
...... And yet
Dauntless the slug-horn to my lips I set,
And blew. ``Childe Roland to the Dark Tower came.''

Childe Roland to the Dark Tower Came

Robert Browning 1812-1889

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Re: untitled

Post by poeticpiers » Thu Nov 13, 2008 9:31 am

enjoyed this poem but it deserves a title
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Post by psychotic pretender » Mon Nov 17, 2008 5:30 pm

glad you enjoyed

thanks for the read

i still havent found the perfect title for this just yet but i promise to post it when it comes to me

thanks again
/My first thought was, he lied in every word,
That hoary cripple, with malicious eye
....
......................................
...... And yet
Dauntless the slug-horn to my lips I set,
And blew. ``Childe Roland to the Dark Tower came.''

Childe Roland to the Dark Tower Came

Robert Browning 1812-1889

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Re: untitled

Post by LostNight » Mon Nov 17, 2008 6:38 pm

I like this one too... how about something like,, -My Past Gently Falls- very nice psychotic pretender :thewave:
The wheels of time
how ever slow
speeds up
as we grow

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So much be said
with so few words

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Post by psychotic pretender » Thu Nov 20, 2008 7:20 am

thanks much

glad you enjoyed

and i will take that title into consideration

thanks again
/My first thought was, he lied in every word,
That hoary cripple, with malicious eye
....
......................................
...... And yet
Dauntless the slug-horn to my lips I set,
And blew. ``Childe Roland to the Dark Tower came.''

Childe Roland to the Dark Tower Came

Robert Browning 1812-1889

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Post by Floetry Spades » Thu Nov 20, 2008 9:41 pm

I love the metaphor of the heart as shattered glass. :grin:
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Post by psychotic pretender » Fri Nov 21, 2008 5:33 am

thanks much

glad you enjoyed
/My first thought was, he lied in every word,
That hoary cripple, with malicious eye
....
......................................
...... And yet
Dauntless the slug-horn to my lips I set,
And blew. ``Childe Roland to the Dark Tower came.''

Childe Roland to the Dark Tower Came

Robert Browning 1812-1889

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Post by wadley gurl » Thu Dec 04, 2008 6:45 am

:hearts: :hello:
Love looks not with the eyes but with the mind
-Helena-
A Midsummer night's dream

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Post by psychotic pretender » Thu Dec 04, 2008 6:46 am

thanks much

glad you enjoyed
/My first thought was, he lied in every word,
That hoary cripple, with malicious eye
....
......................................
...... And yet
Dauntless the slug-horn to my lips I set,
And blew. ``Childe Roland to the Dark Tower came.''

Childe Roland to the Dark Tower Came

Robert Browning 1812-1889

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Post by heinzs » Thu Jun 28, 2012 11:20 pm

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Re: untitled

Post by Moushka » Mon Sep 10, 2012 12:43 am

It seems to be a love between two very different personalities
1.Believe 2.Belong 3.Become
1.Awareness 2.Acceptance 3.Action

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Re: untitled

Post by poeticpiers reborn » Tue Sep 25, 2012 2:56 pm

how strange it is to find that selecting a title can take much longer than composing the poem. and yet it is imperative to find the correct title.

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