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reflections (extended version)

Post by gordy » Fri Jun 14, 2002 2:10 pm

As I sit sullen, staring out the window
at the tree
I see the leaves falling off
and falling
free
One
at a time
or
in pairs
or in three's

Falling freely, until the windy breeze
carries them away from the tree
Like time has carried you from me

It's cold now
the fall has come

I will call it "the fall'
For too sweet is the sound of "autumn"
too sweet and cheery for me
although, maybe it is kind------to some
But to me,
it is fallen hopes.
And autumn dreams
are only undone things

I stare, still, out the window, at the tree
It's dark now and I can see
A reflection in the window of me
It's as if my face is superimposed onto the tree
The empty , lonely, barren tree and me

But the tree is a hopeful thing
For it's leaves will return in spring
But I am left with the truthful sting
That the last of you, I have already seen

this is the original version of this poem that i wrote about six years before the "happier" one. whatdya all think about the difference between the two. [img]images/smiles/icon_wink.gif[/img] [img]images/smiles/icon_razz.gif[/img]
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reflections (extended version)

Post by Moongem » Wed Aug 07, 2002 9:21 am

Ooohh, I like them both, Gordy! I really like the sweet one, but there is something about the darker one that grabs my soul. And what a good idea, to creat 2 versions of a poem with the same name, to show time's affect on a person's life! I must remember to try that, maybe with the 3 Primary Color poems I did, hmmmmmm... [img]images/smiles/icon_smile.gif[/img]

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Post by Gillian » Fri Nov 01, 2002 10:25 am

Hi Gordy -

I really enjoyed both reflections. That's what a reflection is n'est pas? Looking at something, then wondering if its reflection is closer to the truth.

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reflections (extended version)

Post by gordy » Fri Nov 01, 2002 4:49 pm

thanks gill. i love that picture and thanks for the kind words.

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reflections (extended version)

Post by Rose Bordner » Mon Jan 13, 2003 9:04 pm

Such true words I am glad someone had the grace to write them and share them.

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Post by gordy » Sat Nov 20, 2004 7:53 am

if you look closely at the comments in this thread, you will see where heinz gave me permission to keep bringing my poems back up "every now and then".......hence the birth of the "gordying technique"......i havent looked back since.......ahhhhhhhaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhaaa :mrgreen:
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My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?

---Todd Agnew


Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword

---Gordy

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Post by KayRaylee » Tue Oct 09, 2007 2:26 am

Hi gordy,

I believe there is a reason for everything.
Although, we may not understand the reasons,
God, does....and knows.

Beautiful, beautiful.....Poem

Written, Brilliantly

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Re: reflections (extended version)

Post by gordy » Fri Sep 24, 2010 7:24 pm

:mrgreen:
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My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?

---Todd Agnew


Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword

---Gordy

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Re: reflections (extended version)

Post by gordy » Thu Nov 09, 2017 3:09 am

:mrgreen:
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My Jesus hung out with thieves and sluts and liars, which Jesus do you worship?

---Todd Agnew


Perfection is my enemy
Procrastination is his cohort
Persistence is my sword

---Gordy

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