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Post by gordy » Thu Apr 18, 2002 8:01 pm

In my gloom, across the room
I see a leafless tree outside
Through the rain and the window pain
The trees reflection and mine collide

As I start to wonder, I hear the thunder
The window rattles, then comes to rest
Just leaving me and the lonely tree
Even the birds have left their nest

Then without a word, that could be heard
Something stirs inside my soul
And I realize, with some surprise
Even the birds have somewhere to go

Why, without a worry, wings all in a flurry
God picks them up and sends them south
Even the trees regain their leaves
As spring buds sprout all about

Slowly a grin comes creeping in-
to the reflection of the tree and me
The clouds roll away, leaving a sunny day
And the hope of things to be

Although God has allowed the stormy clouds
Obscuring my daily plans for this world
I'll stay strong, because all along
Gods view is not man's, but eternal

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Post by shaz » Fri Apr 19, 2002 8:20 am

that's cool. it's really pretty. i'm looking forward to reading more of your work.

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Post by gordy » Fri Apr 19, 2002 1:06 pm

thanks shaz! i have been writing poems most of my life but just recently have i begun to let people see them. i have so many i am fighting the urge to put a bunch on here because i dont want to overdo it. i will try to keep it down to one or two a day. hehehehe

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Post by moonflower » Fri Apr 19, 2002 1:13 pm

gordy ..i love your poem ..brings to mind that, no matter what, there is always a new beginning..great job..

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Post by AbigailE » Sun Apr 28, 2002 11:27 pm

interesting...i like the way it flows. reminds me of the sun. oh glorious sun!!! [img]images/smiles/icon_wink.gif[/img]
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Post by heinzs » Fri May 03, 2002 10:31 pm

Well, you got Val and Abbie and shaz... I'm surprized bags hasn't been on. Maybe Michael and Patrick will see it, or stephanie. Keep it up for a while... I know that means refreshing it every other day so it stays on page 1 *grin*.

It's a good piece... not my general cup of tea, though. I can see where it would have appeal to others.

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Post by patbly » Fri May 03, 2002 10:35 pm

Gordy, this is wonderful. We are so caught up in our lives of survival that we forget what we have is temporary. Also, if we could just trust in God, we'd find there is great security.

Beautiful!

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Post by gordy » Sun May 05, 2002 10:02 am

thanxs for the encouragement heinz, i wasnt sure if it was proper etiquette to keep bringing them back up every other day or so but if you dont they get lost in the shuffle with so many people posting lately. just let me know if i start getting on peoples nerves but every one i am around in my daily life is not into poetry so this is really the only way i can get some actual input on my work from other poets. thanks for all your comments and paitence. lol

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Post by heinzs » Sun May 05, 2002 11:58 pm

Now, of course, if I thought your poem "sucked" I wouldn't have made the suggestion (LOL) j/k

You're welcome. That's what this board is here for... encouragement and support. Anything less than that is unacceptable here.

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Post by Gillian » Thu May 09, 2002 6:00 pm

Oh Gordy -

You are a bold and brazen bringer-upper from the bottom to the before-my-very-eyes buttercupped bundle of.....(is there a word beginning with b for file-folder).......ummm.....bile-folder doesn't work does it......

Absurd alliteration addles all artistic attempts at articulation.

You have my admiration, both for your poetry, and for your style.

Now, she says (with furrowed brow) - howz about commenting on some of my stuff? Eh Gordy?

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Post by Gillian » Tue May 14, 2002 8:30 pm

Gordy -

Someone please coin another word for "thank you" - but until they do, thank you Gordy for reading and commenting on my stuff. Ta everso !

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Post by Moongem » Wed May 15, 2002 9:58 am

How 'bout, "You be sweet", instead of thank you! Ha! [img]images/smiles/icon_smile.gif[/img] I really like this, Gordy!

"through the rain and the window pain
the trees reflection and mine collide"

Love the image it brings to mind!

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Post by DarkAngel » Wed May 15, 2002 10:02 am

gordy~
this is a really good poem. I really liked it. but If you want people to critique you're writting give them a chance, don't push it. but still good poem keep posting please. [img]images/smiles/icon_wink.gif[/img]

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Post by Guest » Wed May 15, 2002 11:11 pm

that poem was awesome! you are pretty good at this! i look forward to reading more

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Post by heinzs » Tue May 28, 2002 4:06 pm

Hmmm... maybe the audience has gone home?

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