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- Sat Dec 29, 2007 9:57 pm
- Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
- Topic: Death Rolls In . . .
- Replies: 16
- Views: 13315
Re: Death Rolls In . . .
I have never read Randall Jarrell; thank you for posting one of his poems here for me, Heinz. It was haunting. I will look for more. Eyes Untouched, the last verse is my favorite too. Which will be carried away first, the memory of the lost loved one or the one left behind? I am struggling to come t...
- Wed Dec 12, 2007 8:03 am
- Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
- Topic: Cre
- Replies: 9
- Views: 5231
Re: Crecy 1346
I don't think you need to change a word - very powerful poem.
- Wed Dec 12, 2007 8:02 am
- Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
- Topic: Red
- Replies: 2
- Views: 2257
Re: Red
your vampire color for ink that i write with even now oh river of pen stroke across my page overflow with the first hue of the rainbow make a storm of yourself in our hearts then settle like mist to dress our garden I write with your vampire ink in a river of pen strokes that overflows into the fir...
- Wed Dec 05, 2007 6:53 pm
- Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
- Topic: Minus 100 (caution, this is a dark poetry poem)
- Replies: 16
- Views: 9365
Re: Minus 100 (caution, this is a dark poetry poem)
I think it is metaphorical for our unawareness of the consequences of our actions.
- Sun Dec 02, 2007 3:04 pm
- Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
- Topic: untitled #17
- Replies: 5
- Views: 3255
Re: untitled #17
I have taken Mightfalls' revision and played a little with it myself. i hope I didn't alter the meaning of your poem, Jake. But the fun of working revisions is playing with where the poem can go - so take what you like and leave the rest alone! Up until now with stars breaking through the darkest sk...
- Sat Dec 01, 2007 9:43 pm
- Forum: Seeking the Spiritual
- Topic: Vegetables of the Spirit
- Replies: 6
- Views: 5049
Re: Vegetables of the Spirit
ah, yes, Gordy, but the truth about human nature is that without the vegetables we would never appreciate the glory of the fruit.
I love to read the extent of your spirituality!
I love to read the extent of your spirituality!
- Sat Dec 01, 2007 9:38 pm
- Forum: Seeking the Spiritual
- Topic: Heavy Burdens Heavy Loads
- Replies: 23
- Views: 14761
Re: Heavy Burdens Heavy Loads
this is beautifully written
- Sat Dec 01, 2007 9:35 pm
- Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
- Topic: Picnic
- Replies: 4
- Views: 3474
Re: Picnic
I've read this several times and the second verse always stops me - I agree with Heinz. Perhaps you have more to say. . .
women with no power in religion?
nuns and priests not acting as good messangers of their faith?
women with no power in religion?
nuns and priests not acting as good messangers of their faith?
- Sat Dec 01, 2007 9:32 pm
- Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
- Topic: Last line before critique
- Replies: 24
- Views: 12160
Re: Last line before critique
Their liquid blood and solid flesh swollen and struggling ever up to assault the northern sea The rushing is a siren song’s Its liquid blood and solid flesh swells, ever struggling up assaulting the northern sea to the siren's rushing song The reason I chanded tehei to its is because i read ice as ...
- Sat Dec 01, 2007 8:54 pm
- Forum: Members' Poetry Vaults
- Topic: Graeme's Poetry
- Replies: 4
- Views: 9228
Re: Graeme's Poetry
Thank you so much, Heinz. I think I can do it now.
- Sat Dec 01, 2007 9:20 am
- Forum: Community Favorites, Poem of the Week and Poet of the Month
- Topic: Poet of the Month: November 2007 - Cyan
- Replies: 8
- Views: 10728
Re: Poet of the Month: November 2007 - Cyan
Well Done, Cyan!
- Fri Nov 30, 2007 7:34 am
- Forum: Teen Spirit
- Topic: rain
- Replies: 9
- Views: 6859
Re: rain
Blackbanner, this is very thought provoking - I really liked the way it put life into perspective.
Did you mean that?all the is wet and water
- Thu Nov 29, 2007 1:44 pm
- Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
- Topic: Death Rolls In . . .
- Replies: 16
- Views: 13315
Re: Death Rolls In . . .
Yes, Mightfall, you caught the problem I have in most everything. If one or two words will suffice and babble on for two or three sentences.
I often need someone to cut away my excess verbage!
I often need someone to cut away my excess verbage!
- Tue Nov 27, 2007 6:00 pm
- Forum: Poet Laureate October 2007 - March 2008: Nekot
- Topic: Spice of Life: Meet BeeJay
- Replies: 9
- Views: 11693
Re: Spice of Life: Meet BeeJay
Nice to meet you close up Bee Jay!
- Fri Nov 23, 2007 3:38 pm
- Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
- Topic: Death Rolls In . . .
- Replies: 16
- Views: 13315
Re: Death Rolls In . . .
Thank you, Heinz, I really like the way you pared this down for me. My feelings are no longer lost in the words. I really miss being in a poetry response group, advice like yours is so important to growth! My hear aches for you; the pain of losing a child is a sore that can never heal. I think it re...