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You want to hear something funny? I think this is great, but I think it would be even greater with the actual words "fucking", removed. Second paragraph: just end on "it's magic." period. 5th paragraph, just delete "fucking" before the "raunchy". Also try just deleting "cock, cunt" and leave the res...

Totally sweet, KC. This is so reminiscent for me of the Andre Norton books I was weaned on.

Thanks, ec... I made her mute on purpose. Glad you liked it!

Thank you, nefertari... I'm pleased that you think so!

No ideas on sequels... maybe later.

I think this is the original post, then I must have done so again at a later date. Here are some other comments: Lil Gray Silver Fox Poet Posted: 20 Mar 2003 06:03:pm Post subject: Digging the Bones -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- (*shudder) Another c...

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Part of your memoires... needs more.

Hey, I like this story...

I'll do it for you on this one. You can use the edit function to do this yourself in the future, also to change the title. Title could be "Dear Diary", "My Diary", "Diary of a ______?", etc. etc. use your vivid imagination. Heinz [img]images/smiles/icon_biggrin.gif[/img] [ 06-09-2002: Message edited...

The trick is to put these all into the same string and not separate them as individual posts. They stand alone as single entries, but create a greater whole when part of the entire diary.

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Perfect! Now add submissions through the developmenta years and you've got a great piece going!

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Not too many interested in stories or prose... mine don't get much traffic here either.

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I think the big section that starts "The first time...", with all those // dividers could do with being broken into real paragraphs to make it more "presentable" and readable. Think of it as prose, which it is, and let the paragraph breaks suggest themselves to you. As you are doing that, superfluou...