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by nacona
Mon Oct 23, 2006 8:18 am
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: Matchbooks 4th Draft
Replies: 11
Views: 2821

OK, so I broke this apart into stanzas a couple different ways, and I think that breaking this poem apart actually takes away from the flow of the poem. I do not always write poems that flow together like this, and I am certainly one to break a poem apart and play with the form. This poem is one tha...
by nacona
Sat Oct 21, 2006 7:31 am
Forum: Community Favorites, Poem of the Week and Poet of the Month
Topic: COMMUNITY FAVORITES NOMINATIONS!!!
Replies: 19
Views: 41456

I nominate the following-

Title: "What a Censor is"
Author: Drew Rush
Catagory: Poetry from the Dark Side
Link: http://www.poetrypages.com/phpBB2/viewtopic.php?t=47242
by nacona
Thu Oct 19, 2006 7:23 pm
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: Matchbooks 4th Draft
Replies: 11
Views: 2821

This is my 2nd draft of this, I am just not sure how I feel about it split up like this, but I am testing it on here to see what everyone thinks and then I will decide what I will do with it
by nacona
Tue Oct 17, 2006 11:14 am
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: The melancholy eyes
Replies: 2
Views: 1376

Coolpoet, I think that I posted a crit on this in another room, but I could be wrong :wink: I recall telling you for one of your poems that the double spacing takes away from the work, as is the case here. I think one thing that would help is to loose the double spacing to draw the poem back togethe...
by nacona
Tue Oct 17, 2006 11:12 am
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: Matchbooks 4th Draft
Replies: 11
Views: 2821

Matchbooks 4th Draft

Matchbooks She is Barbie in a package! The thick glass glosses her features, and I can barely make out her face or the sunshine of her hair, but I imagine her fear- filled eyes staring ...................... down ......................... at ......................... me as I stand looking up at her...
by nacona
Mon Oct 02, 2006 3:12 am
Forum: Briefs:
Topic: Senryu #1
Replies: 4
Views: 954

Senryu #1

Senryu #1

her body a curved
hourglass tonight
her kisses steal time



9/27/2006
3rd Draft
Charlotte, NC
by nacona
Tue Aug 15, 2006 7:30 am
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: Silver Dreams - an example of critique
Replies: 9
Views: 5563

Poetness, Silver drops of windowpane in mosaic dreams as the sunbeams light the lining of gold in the precious woes in melting away the fabric of tears glinting forever’s beyond as dawn of rays shining upon the sea of a window sill as an island of grey. First let me say that I had a little bit of a ...

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