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by Jade
Thu Nov 29, 2012 12:12 am
Forum: Seeking the Spiritual
Topic: Jesus, My Beloved Savior
Replies: 5
Views: 747

Re: Jesus, My Beloved Savior

Oooooo this is beautiful and breath taking. You have such a gift! I love it.

When I read it I added one more sylable to the ending line... I see where you were matching though as well. Just thought I would let you know.

I bet you can feel the holy ghost when you sing this in praise!
by Jade
Thu Nov 29, 2012 12:05 am
Forum: Seeking the Spiritual
Topic: Psalm 911 (from the pruning floor)
Replies: 16
Views: 2662

Re: Psalm 911 (from the pruning floor)

Ok Gordy... this is Jade. I changed my name for some reason I no longer remember. lol But anywho... You have me so excited to leave a reply to this poem that I can't even take time to read the replies you have already received. I loved this. Wish it were longer as your story telling ablilites are su...
by Jade
Wed Nov 28, 2012 11:59 pm
Forum: Seeking the Spiritual
Topic: I'm Closer Now To Heaven
Replies: 8
Views: 896

Re: I'm Closer Now To Heaven

Ah I very much enjoyed this.
by Jade
Wed Nov 28, 2012 11:57 pm
Forum: Seeking the Spiritual
Topic: A New Beginning
Replies: 5
Views: 1444

A New Beginning

I could not hear, I could not see The massess had gathered and swallowed me My pains were many and my tears did flow My heart fell weaker every place that I'd go Till weakened and tired, humble and small I forced my eyes open and I listened for your call Your angels then appeared to help me sleep th...
by Jade
Sun Aug 07, 2011 6:16 pm
Forum: General Poetry
Topic: Abused and Ignored
Replies: 3
Views: 476

Abused and Ignored

Abused and Ignored I met a woman today that could not stand She could not walk She could not run Her legs were broken from abuse I sat with her for a while Listening to her story And as I listened, I cried She had so much to tell So much that everyone needed to hear Her tale – the tale of a broken ...
by Jade
Tue Jul 26, 2011 6:03 pm
Forum: In Tribute
Topic: The Session
Replies: 2
Views: 781

The Session

The Session What are you doing? [indent]I’m climbing in the closet.[/indent] Why are you climbing in the closet? [indent]I’m trying to hide…[/indent] What are you trying to hide from? Now let me ask you a question, Do you really want to know what she’s hiding from? What they all hide from? I don’t....
by Jade
Mon Jun 20, 2011 8:10 am
Forum: General Poetry
Topic: You don't know (Inspired by Sylvia Plath)
Replies: 4
Views: 809

Re: You don't know (Inspired by Sylvia Plath)

I forgot about this poem. yikes.
by Jade
Mon Jun 20, 2011 8:08 am
Forum: Love and Romance
Topic: Sent in for publication Off to war
Replies: 10
Views: 1711

Re: Sent in for publication Off to war

Havent heard anything so maybe they didn't like it as much as I had hoped. Thank you everyone for your feedback.
by Jade
Mon Mar 30, 2009 9:49 am
Forum: Love and Romance
Topic: We, The Better For It
Replies: 10
Views: 940

Re: We, The Better For It

Thinking about putting this poem into Chicken Soup for the Soul (True Love).
Does anyone have any suggestions on how to make it better or if I should just leave it as is?
Any feedback would be wonderful and very much appreciated.
by Jade
Wed Mar 25, 2009 8:02 am
Forum: Love and Romance
Topic: Love at First Sight
Replies: 8
Views: 1136

Re: Love at First Sight

Though it lacks imagery it still gives off imagery... I love it. Twirling through a galaxy. Beautiful. I can see it even though you didn't write it. Well Done.
by Jade
Wed Mar 25, 2009 7:58 am
Forum: Love and Romance
Topic: She is my home for My Lady Irene
Replies: 3
Views: 384

Re: She is my home for My Lady Irene

I loved the beginning of this poem. You had such great imagery. The rest of the poem could use some of that. Describe the threshold... describe the empty house... description is key (in my own opinion). I'm surprised you haven't gotten anymore replies to this than mine. This is a good poem just need...
by Jade
Wed Mar 25, 2009 7:53 am
Forum: Love and Romance
Topic: Reconstructing our Future
Replies: 3
Views: 260

Re: Reconstructing our Future

not sure what to think about this. It seems like it could be a good poem but what you have right now sounds more like a segment from a movie script because you say Eve does this and the waiter does that in a non poetic way. It really felt like I was reading a script to a movie. Probably not what you...
by Jade
Wed Mar 25, 2009 7:47 am
Forum: Love and Romance
Topic: Lies
Replies: 3
Views: 295

Re: Lies

I like this poem a lot. It's short which plays in its favor. It's a poem that will make you think afterwards.
I especially liked the lines:

Inside her kiss
I think you were never like this
Still
The taste of your lips
I surely miss

Why did it sound so much better
When you said forever?
by Jade
Wed Mar 25, 2009 7:44 am
Forum: Love and Romance
Topic: Unforgetable You
Replies: 3
Views: 300

Re: Unforgetable You

This poem just doesn't do it for me. The rhyme seems cliche and sometimes forced. The line "With you I could forget" doesn't make sense with the rest of the poem. And in the line "this mask I where" should have where being written as wear. Sorry if I seem a little harsh. I don't mean to be. You have...

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