Poetry Pages

Crumbling..... Cliffs on the shore, Eroded to dust What is this? I knew you..... Now you want to change? Hiding your true self all this time My old Friend Nothingness I was inspired by a line I jotted down "As I crumble to dust, I learn the true meaning of nothingness" It will be in a future piece,...

wow i can really feel the emotions coming out of this piece, thx for sharing

this speaks volumes to me, very well wrote and i really enjoyed the way you captured the emotions

When I think of how we met....... Two strangers in the same lane on the information highway As we passed I noticed a shine from your eyes that nearly stopped time The seconds got longer, The more I looked the more I began to ponder How it felt you seemed familiar like a old memory played again As th...

I really like this, well written and the way everything comes together works great. Thx for sharing

lol nice one Thx for the laugh

Excellent piece, really enjoyed reading it. Thx for sharing

Nice dark poem, I can relate. I really liked the end line

Very nice write

Down this road once again I look back and you disappeared, Realizing my greatest of fears I love you, I hate you I want you....to go away I need you....Please just stay Tears of my need for you, Disgust Whispers of your fears of us, Mistrust Sadly Ms., This is us Time after time, Over and over Alway...

Thank you, both of you. This is my favorite write, seems complete. More so then my other works

Nicely written, an emotional ride from low to high of overcoming the past

My favorite part

Travis wrote:Wake me from these dreams
Nothing is as it seems
Memories of melancholy madness
Scarred and stirred sadness

I can related to those feelings

To be me... To be you... To be we

Self lost entangled and wrapped.
Self gone, Other became and remains.
Drowning in us, Ripped apart.
Self again.

Me... You... End

I really like the flow of this, The rhyming is excellent through out. Well penned! :thumbsup: The first few lines for me were amazing I wanted to be your superhero I wanted to be your sun I wanted to be your laughter Your teardrops, your dreams, your fun :bow: I can only hope to write lines that are...

Some of the awkwardness comes in the length of the lines giving mixed signals to natural breaks in rhythm or speech pattern. Yes I see what you mean I like what you did with it, Now to see if I can use your example to make it my own once again Minimalize where you can and show or feel rather than t...