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by CamelToe
Fri May 29, 2015 11:05 pm
Forum: General Poetry
Topic: Today I learned
Replies: 0
Views: 584

Today I learned

Crumbling..... Cliffs on the shore, Eroded to dust What is this? I knew you..... Now you want to change? Hiding your true self all this time My old Friend Nothingness I was inspired by a line I jotted down "As I crumble to dust, I learn the true meaning of nothingness" It will be in a future piece,...
by CamelToe
Wed May 27, 2015 9:23 pm
Forum: The New Members' Café
Topic: Happiness
Replies: 1
Views: 1666

Re: Happiness

wow i can really feel the emotions coming out of this piece, thx for sharing
by CamelToe
Wed May 27, 2015 8:40 pm
Forum: Love and Romance
Topic: Humble Strength
Replies: 4
Views: 967

Re: Humble Strength

this speaks volumes to me, very well wrote and i really enjoyed the way you captured the emotions
by CamelToe
Wed May 27, 2015 8:31 pm
Forum: Love and Romance
Topic: Familiar Stranger
Replies: 0
Views: 556

Familiar Stranger

When I think of how we met....... Two strangers in the same lane on the information highway As we passed I noticed a shine from your eyes that nearly stopped time The seconds got longer, The more I looked the more I began to ponder How it felt you seemed familiar like a old memory played again As th...
by CamelToe
Tue Jun 17, 2014 7:47 pm
Forum: General Poetry
Topic: Bones
Replies: 3
Views: 839

Re: Bones

I really like this, well written and the way everything comes together works great. Thx for sharing
by CamelToe
Tue Jun 17, 2014 7:41 pm
Forum: Fun & Games
Topic: The world's smartest man
Replies: 2
Views: 3460

Re: The world's smartest man

lol nice one :thumbsup: Thx for the laugh
by CamelToe
Tue Jun 17, 2014 7:33 pm
Forum: General Poetry
Topic: Managed Care
Replies: 2
Views: 509

Re: Managed Care

Excellent piece, really enjoyed reading it. Thx for sharing
by CamelToe
Tue Jun 17, 2014 6:40 pm
Forum: The New Members' Café
Topic: I can't go on like this
Replies: 4
Views: 1733

Re: I can't go on like this

Nice dark poem, I can relate. I really liked the end line
by CamelToe
Wed Feb 13, 2013 10:17 pm
Forum: General Poetry
Topic: Always Be There
Replies: 7
Views: 987

Re: Always Be There

Very nice write :thumbsup:
by CamelToe
Wed Feb 06, 2013 12:33 am
Forum: The New Members' Café
Topic: Again and Again
Replies: 1
Views: 1070

Again and Again

Down this road once again I look back and you disappeared, Realizing my greatest of fears I love you, I hate you I want you....to go away I need you....Please just stay Tears of my need for you, Disgust Whispers of your fears of us, Mistrust Sadly Ms., This is us Time after time, Over and over Alway...
by CamelToe
Fri Dec 14, 2012 12:31 am
Forum: Love and Romance
Topic: A simple question
Replies: 6
Views: 1134

Re: A simple question

Thank you, both of you. This is my favorite write, seems complete. More so then my other works
by CamelToe
Tue Dec 11, 2012 1:26 am
Forum: The New Members' Café
Topic: Inner Child
Replies: 3
Views: 1361

Re: Inner Child

Nicely written, an emotional ride from low to high of overcoming the past

My favorite part
Travis wrote:Wake me from these dreams
Nothing is as it seems
Memories of melancholy madness
Scarred and stirred sadness
I can related to those feelings
by CamelToe
Sun Dec 09, 2012 2:23 pm
Forum: Love and Romance
Topic: Evolution of the end
Replies: 1
Views: 542

Evolution of the end

To be me... To be you... To be we

Self lost entangled and wrapped.
Self gone, Other became and remains.
Drowning in us, Ripped apart.
Self again.

Me... You... End
by CamelToe
Sun Dec 09, 2012 1:55 pm
Forum: Love and Romance
Topic: Angelic
Replies: 4
Views: 1130

Re: *********

I really like the flow of this, The rhyming is excellent through out. Well penned! :thumbsup: The first few lines for me were amazing I wanted to be your superhero I wanted to be your sun I wanted to be your laughter Your teardrops, your dreams, your fun :bow: I can only hope to write lines that are...
by CamelToe
Sun Dec 09, 2012 1:24 pm
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: Time (Seeking Refinement, Critique ect..)
Replies: 3
Views: 1127

Re: Time (Seeking Refinement, Critique ect..)

Some of the awkwardness comes in the length of the lines giving mixed signals to natural breaks in rhythm or speech pattern. Yes I see what you mean I like what you did with it, Now to see if I can use your example to make it my own once again Minimalize where you can and show or feel rather than t...

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