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- Mon Oct 15, 2012 2:07 pm
- Forum: Seeking the Spiritual
- Topic: Oceans of Love
- Replies: 4
- Views: 3703
Re: Oceans of Love
I know the Iambics are off in the last line, maybe the last two lines, yet... I was careful in what I wanted it to say. Thanks for commenting. hugs, Catie :)
- Mon Oct 15, 2012 11:54 am
- Forum: Seeking the Spiritual
- Topic: Oceans of Love
- Replies: 4
- Views: 3703
Oceans of Love
As I was walking through the sands of time, dark storms were raging in my haggard soul. The waves broke hard, with beauty so sublime, their sprays were whispering of more to know. Then, I was picking shells along the way that tide had left there just beyond the bluff; I thought to save them for a ra...
- Mon Oct 15, 2012 8:40 am
- Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
- Topic: Soul Speak
- Replies: 2
- Views: 3466
Soul Speak
I have been the shadow... in varying aspects, known it deeply, wore it under my skin, claimed it discreetly, in quiet respects of my own. I watched it slithering behind many joyful experiences of unaware, naive mankind. I have experienced the worst made each wry mistake (heaven knows), and felt pure...
- Mon Oct 15, 2012 8:35 am
- Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
- Topic: Remainders [Seeking refinement help etc}
- Replies: 2
- Views: 3978
Re: Remainders [Seeking refinement help etc}
There is a lot of redundancy in this one which kind of throws the reader off, as far as interest is concerned. why not, change a few of the lines that say "of his father left in him." I see that line used three times. whereas, if you could find a way to say it another way, in the second and third in...
- Mon Oct 15, 2012 8:31 am
- Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
- Topic: Forlorn ( a Sonnet)
- Replies: 2
- Views: 3471
Re: Forlorn ( a Sonnet)
I really like this one. Again, your Iambics are spot on. I only had a little trouble keeping up the second line in the third verse, but finally decided it was because, or probably due to my mispronunciation of the word "traipse." Enjoyed your poem very much. This Iambic pentameter seems to come natu...
- Mon Oct 15, 2012 8:23 am
- Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
- Topic: No Battle's Ever Over Till It's Done (Sonnet)
- Replies: 3
- Views: 4007
Re: No Battle's Ever Over Till It's Done (Sonnet)
Perfect Iambic Pentameter. Sows real skill in this difficult form. hugs, catie :)
- Mon Oct 15, 2012 8:19 am
- Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
- Topic: She calls me Verrazano
- Replies: 10
- Views: 8974
Re: She calls me Verrazano
While this is very nice the way it is, I, personally thought it would make an excellent longer poem. Do you have anything more you could add to it? hugs, catie :)
- Mon Oct 15, 2012 8:08 am
- Forum: General Poetry
- Topic: Voices Reign
- Replies: 1
- Views: 1682
Re: Voices Reign
a sad, sad poem. Life is hard. hugs, Catie :)
- Mon Oct 15, 2012 8:07 am
- Forum: General Poetry
- Topic: Upcoming Star
- Replies: 2
- Views: 2050
Re: Upcoming Star
anything is possible. hugs, catie :)
- Mon Oct 15, 2012 8:05 am
- Forum: General Poetry
- Topic: We only have ourselves to blame.
- Replies: 2
- Views: 1837
Re: We only have ourselves to blame.
yes, these are really scary times we live in. Enjoyed your poem. hugs, catie :)
- Sun Oct 14, 2012 5:38 pm
- Forum: General Poetry
- Topic: Paradigm Shift
- Replies: 7
- Views: 3282
Re: Paradigm Shift
Hi Bags! :) Enjoyed this poem of yours. hugs, catie :)
- Sat Oct 13, 2012 2:45 pm
- Forum: The New Members' Café
- Topic: Read Between the lines
- Replies: 6
- Views: 9046
Re: Read Between the lines
between those lines I see a beautiful soul. loved your poem. hugs, catie :)
- Sat Oct 13, 2012 2:42 pm
- Forum: The New Members' Café
- Topic: Oceans Green-Edited
- Replies: 3
- Views: 4553
Re: Oceans Green-Edited
Beautiful poem. i am looking forward to reading more of yours. hugs, catie :)
- Sat Oct 13, 2012 2:39 pm
- Forum: The New Members' Café
- Topic: Time Through & Time Through
- Replies: 2
- Views: 5990
Re: Time Through & Time Through
I really enjoyed reading your poem today. Such raw emotions run through it. I hope that love does not twist to hate for you. hugs, catie :)
- Sat Oct 13, 2012 2:17 pm
- Forum: The New Members' Café
- Topic: Soul Speak
- Replies: 2
- Views: 5681
Soul Speak
I have been the shadow... in varying aspects, known it deeply, wore it under my skin, claimed it discreetly, in quiet respects of my own. I watched it slithering behind many joyful experiences of unaware, naive mankind. I have experienced the worst made each wry mistake (heaven knows), and felt pure...