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by CatieRose
Mon Oct 15, 2012 2:07 pm
Forum: Seeking the Spiritual
Topic: Oceans of Love
Replies: 4
Views: 1098

Re: Oceans of Love

I know the Iambics are off in the last line, maybe the last two lines, yet... I was careful in what I wanted it to say. Thanks for commenting. hugs, Catie :)
by CatieRose
Mon Oct 15, 2012 11:54 am
Forum: Seeking the Spiritual
Topic: Oceans of Love
Replies: 4
Views: 1098

Oceans of Love

As I was walking through the sands of time, dark storms were raging in my haggard soul. The waves broke hard, with beauty so sublime, their sprays were whispering of more to know. Then, I was picking shells along the way that tide had left there just beyond the bluff; I thought to save them for a ra...
by CatieRose
Mon Oct 15, 2012 8:40 am
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: Soul Speak
Replies: 2
Views: 1181

Soul Speak

I have been the shadow... in varying aspects, known it deeply, wore it under my skin, claimed it discreetly, in quiet respects of my own. I watched it slithering behind many joyful experiences of unaware, naive mankind. I have experienced the worst made each wry mistake (heaven knows), and felt pure...
by CatieRose
Mon Oct 15, 2012 8:35 am
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: Remainders [Seeking refinement help etc}
Replies: 2
Views: 1492

Re: Remainders [Seeking refinement help etc}

There is a lot of redundancy in this one which kind of throws the reader off, as far as interest is concerned. why not, change a few of the lines that say "of his father left in him." I see that line used three times. whereas, if you could find a way to say it another way, in the second and third in...
by CatieRose
Mon Oct 15, 2012 8:31 am
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: Forlorn ( a Sonnet)
Replies: 2
Views: 1279

Re: Forlorn ( a Sonnet)

I really like this one. Again, your Iambics are spot on. I only had a little trouble keeping up the second line in the third verse, but finally decided it was because, or probably due to my mispronunciation of the word "traipse." Enjoyed your poem very much. This Iambic pentameter seems to come natu...
by CatieRose
Mon Oct 15, 2012 8:23 am
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: No Battle's Ever Over Till It's Done (Sonnet)
Replies: 3
Views: 1491

Re: No Battle's Ever Over Till It's Done (Sonnet)

Perfect Iambic Pentameter. Sows real skill in this difficult form. hugs, catie :)
by CatieRose
Mon Oct 15, 2012 8:19 am
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: She calls me Verrazano
Replies: 10
Views: 3559

Re: She calls me Verrazano

While this is very nice the way it is, I, personally thought it would make an excellent longer poem. Do you have anything more you could add to it? hugs, catie :)
by CatieRose
Mon Oct 15, 2012 8:08 am
Forum: General Poetry
Topic: Voices Reign
Replies: 1
Views: 515

Re: Voices Reign

a sad, sad poem. Life is hard. hugs, Catie :)
by CatieRose
Mon Oct 15, 2012 8:07 am
Forum: General Poetry
Topic: Upcoming Star
Replies: 2
Views: 608

Re: Upcoming Star

anything is possible. hugs, catie :)
by CatieRose
Mon Oct 15, 2012 8:05 am
Forum: General Poetry
Topic: We only have ourselves to blame.
Replies: 2
Views: 615

Re: We only have ourselves to blame.

yes, these are really scary times we live in. Enjoyed your poem. hugs, catie :)
by CatieRose
Sun Oct 14, 2012 5:38 pm
Forum: General Poetry
Topic: Paradigm Shift
Replies: 7
Views: 987

Re: Paradigm Shift

Hi Bags! :) Enjoyed this poem of yours. hugs, catie :)
by CatieRose
Sat Oct 13, 2012 2:45 pm
Forum: The New Members' Café
Topic: Read Between the lines
Replies: 6
Views: 3281

Re: Read Between the lines

between those lines I see a beautiful soul. loved your poem. hugs, catie :)
by CatieRose
Sat Oct 13, 2012 2:42 pm
Forum: The New Members' Café
Topic: Oceans Green-Edited
Replies: 3
Views: 1901

Re: Oceans Green-Edited

Beautiful poem. i am looking forward to reading more of yours. hugs, catie :)
by CatieRose
Sat Oct 13, 2012 2:39 pm
Forum: The New Members' Café
Topic: Time Through & Time Through
Replies: 2
Views: 2020

Re: Time Through & Time Through

I really enjoyed reading your poem today. Such raw emotions run through it. I hope that love does not twist to hate for you. hugs, catie :)
by CatieRose
Sat Oct 13, 2012 2:17 pm
Forum: The New Members' Café
Topic: Soul Speak
Replies: 2
Views: 1950

Soul Speak

I have been the shadow... in varying aspects, known it deeply, wore it under my skin, claimed it discreetly, in quiet respects of my own. I watched it slithering behind many joyful experiences of unaware, naive mankind. I have experienced the worst made each wry mistake (heaven knows), and felt pure...

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