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by partialpoet
Wed Aug 29, 2012 10:55 am
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: Insomnia
Replies: 2
Views: 1128

Re: Insomnia

you're right, it's supposed to be rain on the window--some small outside light casting shadows on the ceiling--but that isn't effectively expressed.
by partialpoet
Tue Aug 28, 2012 11:15 am
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: How do "you" create poetry?
Replies: 7
Views: 2070

Re: How do "you" create poetry?

I close my eyes and try to experience the subject again and again until I'm able to articulate it, or at least get my fingers moving. Whiskey and adagios help.

Meter, rhyme, and the aesthetics of the prose is an afterthought; insofar as I'm not concerned with those things initially.
by partialpoet
Tue Aug 28, 2012 10:30 am
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: What Gentleman Would Speak With Stones(A Villanelle)
Replies: 5
Views: 1643

Re: What Gentleman Would Speak With Stones(A Villanelle)

I honestly don't know anything about forms, and very little about what smart people say constitutes a good poem.

But I like this one a lot. Very nice work.
by partialpoet
Tue Aug 28, 2012 10:12 am
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: Jake
Replies: 1
Views: 1085

Jake

I knew he hurt; I saw the scars there on his skin and in his eyes;
I let him down when after all that time I never asked him why—
That boy I knew with the brilliant smile who hung himself outside.
by partialpoet
Tue Aug 28, 2012 10:11 am
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: Insomnia
Replies: 2
Views: 1128

Insomnia

Feeling darker than the bedroom that is haunted by the thought
That I’m betraying all that matters in pursuit of what does not;
Counting shadows on the ceiling that are cast there by the rain,
As I lay sleepless in the knowledge that I don’t intend to change.

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