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by pencil pusher
Thu Mar 10, 2011 8:19 am
Forum: The New Members' Café
Topic: Cold Indifference
Replies: 2
Views: 555

Re: Cold Indifference

Hey that's nice :) A breakfast can break many barriers!
Love the alliterations and how the food arrangement pictures your experience together. Clever :wink:

:cool:
by pencil pusher
Mon Mar 07, 2011 9:47 am
Forum: General Poetry
Topic: karma
Replies: 3
Views: 679

Re: karma

Haha..and the first cut is the deepest :wink:

All better now though thanks :grin:
by pencil pusher
Mon Mar 07, 2011 9:45 am
Forum: The New Members' Café
Topic: Memories Of An English Summer Day - (old me)
Replies: 6
Views: 835

Re: Memories Of An English Summer Day - (old me)

Great stuff thanks! I shall make some changes as recommended and see how it feels. Thanks again :cool:
by pencil pusher
Mon Mar 07, 2011 9:44 am
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: This Picture - (please critique)
Replies: 9
Views: 2235

Re: This Picture - (please critique)

Thanks very much for your time and kind coments. It's very gratifying to know that what I write isn't completely wasted and is appreciated :grin: I am, however, intrigued by your comments concerning categorisation and wondered if you might be able to expand further on your thoughts? How would you de...
by pencil pusher
Fri Feb 18, 2011 3:05 pm
Forum: General Poetry
Topic: karma
Replies: 3
Views: 679

karma

I’ve lived a fairly carefree life never sheltered but hardly careless thus I’ve escaped the pain of serious injuries and avoided situations that were rife with life threatening circumstances the like of which you’re more likely to find within the pages of Readers Digest in the darkest of dentists wa...
by pencil pusher
Thu Feb 17, 2011 7:01 am
Forum: General Poetry
Topic: a gift from cyrus
Replies: 2
Views: 577

a gift from cyrus

I shall never forget his diminutive stature and pock-marked face his grasp of the Queens English offset by Farsi inflection and his brown leather driving gloves patterned with a myriad of ventilation pinpricks mostly I will not forget his expressionless eyes ha! unwitting pawn take this innocuous pa...
by pencil pusher
Fri Feb 11, 2011 1:10 pm
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: This Picture - (please critique)
Replies: 9
Views: 2235

Re: This Picture - (please critique) - Take 2

I call your name you turn your head and smile (click) an auburn avalanche cascades toward your shoulder with a bouffant attitude as the month old perm concedes custody of the curls your backward glance transfixes me with its hazel clarity and I almost miss the moment your smile generates a warmth t...
by pencil pusher
Fri Feb 11, 2011 1:08 pm
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: This Picture - (please critique)
Replies: 9
Views: 2235

Re: This Picture - (please critique)

Wow thanks :grin: I hope your faith is not misplaced. I have taken on board your comment and agree with it totally. It was so obviously wrong and I should have done something about it before posting but you've given me the nudge I needed. The only problem is that in changing it, one thing led to ano...
by pencil pusher
Thu Feb 10, 2011 5:03 pm
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: This Picture - (please critique)
Replies: 9
Views: 2235

This Picture - (please critique)

THIS PICTURE I call your name you turn your head and smile (click) your beautiful auburn hair falls below your shoulder seemingly bouffant as the month old perm loses custody of the curls your eyes pierce me with hazel clarity I am transfixed by their gaze and nearly miss this perfect shot and your...
by pencil pusher
Thu Feb 03, 2011 11:12 am
Forum: Love and Romance
Topic: A Love Sedoka
Replies: 1
Views: 579

A Love Sedoka

I have lived two lives and many broken dreams yet your love is the life I need to make me complete your love gives my life meaning you, the mender of my dreams <<>> Sedoka: The Sedoka is an unrhymed poem made up of two three-line katauta with the following syllable counts: 5/7/7, 5/7/7. A Sedoka, pa...
by pencil pusher
Sun Jan 30, 2011 4:23 pm
Forum: Love and Romance
Topic: Essence
Replies: 2
Views: 503

Essence

I still sense you

your scent lingers
like the fresh smell
of distant rain
after a storm

in the darkness
of your absence
I inhale
your essence

and sense you still
by pencil pusher
Fri Jan 28, 2011 3:19 pm
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: notebook
Replies: 5
Views: 1429

Re: notebook

Haha...thanks guys for your honest and forthright responses..I love it!! In hindsight i shouldn't have really posted this one. This 'poem' is pure kowtow. It is the contrived claptrap revision of one that was given quite a harsh slating for various reasons in another poetry group that I frequent. It...
by pencil pusher
Fri Jan 28, 2011 12:26 pm
Forum: General Poetry
Topic: TRAFALGAR (Where England Expects)
Replies: 4
Views: 739

TRAFALGAR (Where England Expects)

English Ship English Persona French-Spanish Ship French-Spanish Persona <<>> TRAFALGAR Prelude The Franco-Spanish fleet blockaded at Cádiz, On September Sixteenth, Eighteen-ought-Five, Heard orders from Napoleon for the moment to seize: “Set sail for Naples and there conquest contrive!” But Admiral...
by pencil pusher
Mon Jan 24, 2011 2:45 pm
Forum: General Poetry
Topic: Godifgu
Replies: 2
Views: 419

Godifgu

GODIFGU The fair Lady Godifgu, the Lady of Coventry town; In anguish she wept and with anger was fraught At the misery, Leofric’s tax had brought down Upon the folk who, ere the tax, already had naught. At this she saddened and in her mind a plan was caught: Godifgu, ‘tis said, came to Leofric when...
by pencil pusher
Mon Jan 24, 2011 2:39 pm
Forum: General Poetry
Topic: Blood donation
Replies: 1
Views: 353

Re: Blood donation

Haha! Excellent stuff.... I vant to suck your throat! :lol:
A whole new concept for me.. a toothless, powerless, aged vampire.. great stuff :thumbsup:

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