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by Mightfall
Mon Nov 13, 2017 7:59 pm
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: Looking to improve this song for an excericise
Replies: 5
Views: 55

Re: Looking to improve this song for an excericise

Someone who knows who Nick Cave, awesome hehe.

Thank you for your wonderful suggestions.

Now I just have to find some way to take a sledge hammer to the timing
by Mightfall
Mon Nov 13, 2017 5:33 am
Forum: Love and Romance
Topic: Sleep Apnea (Divine Intervention)
Replies: 5
Views: 53

Re: Sleep Apnea (Divine Intervention)

I love it and the new title is great
by Mightfall
Mon Nov 13, 2017 4:27 am
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: Looking to improve this song for an excericise
Replies: 5
Views: 55

Looking to improve this song for an excericise

I needs to be smoother 4,5,6 and any wording improvement. Any community suggestions are welcome. It is a dark hard piano piece, or will be when the timing is right lol. Content If my next breath and my last breath each Somehow crossed your lips If my next heartbeat and my last were each In perfect s...
by Mightfall
Fri Jul 21, 2017 7:58 pm
Forum: The New Members' Café
Topic: WELCOME BACK!!!!
Replies: 11
Views: 1018

Re: WELCOME BACK!!!!

Woohoo!!! I'm thrilled to read this news!! I haven't checked back in a few months since it was down for awhile. I was thinking PP had gone the way of the dinosaur. So :thewave: that's not the case. (i don't do FB so wouldn't see any announcements there. :hello: ) Thank you Heinz and Mark! Hey my fr...
by Mightfall
Sun Jul 10, 2016 10:35 pm
Forum: Love and Romance
Topic: Heat
Replies: 2
Views: 433

Re: Heat

heinzs wrote:I wouldn't touch a word of it. It's perfect as it is.
Thanks, that's so kind.
by Mightfall
Wed Apr 20, 2016 8:27 pm
Forum: Funny Business
Topic: Sentimental
Replies: 2
Views: 1792

Re: Sentimental

That was fun!
by Mightfall
Wed Apr 20, 2016 8:27 pm
Forum: Funny Business
Topic: Space!
Replies: 1
Views: 453

Space!

Space You broke my heart when, you said you need some space You left me at the alter, I built for you at home You said let's just be friends, to the officer in your hallway You said you’re not ready for the commitment, hearing And I haven't stopped crying, though the pepper spray’s all gone Is not y...
by Mightfall
Wed Apr 20, 2016 8:11 pm
Forum: Love and Romance
Topic: Love
Replies: 3
Views: 607

Re: Love

I like this alot. It's a nice pace.
by Mightfall
Wed Apr 20, 2016 4:52 pm
Forum: Love and Romance
Topic: Heat
Replies: 2
Views: 433

Heat

Heat Soaking you with Kerosene Kisses My tongue a flint, and yours steel My fingers kindling for the fire That started in my mind, so long ago I breath purposefully across your skin stoking the still approaching blaze critique, areas for improvement, it's really dense, so the perfect words/phrases w...
by Mightfall
Fri Mar 25, 2016 8:35 am
Forum: The New Members' Café
Topic: Photography
Replies: 3
Views: 941

Re: Photography

:cool:
by Mightfall
Mon Sep 17, 2012 6:21 am
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: She calls me Verrazano
Replies: 10
Views: 1736

Re: She calls me Verrazano


Yup, it meant something to me after I looked it up. I was just commenting, certainly not a criticism.

when I found out what it meant I smiled.

This is great.
by Mightfall
Fri Aug 31, 2012 6:56 pm
Forum: The New Members' Café
Topic: "the path most common"
Replies: 4
Views: 791

Re: "the path most common"

Very Nice,

Welcome
by Mightfall
Tue Aug 28, 2012 10:48 pm
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: Remainders [Seeking refinement help etc}
Replies: 2
Views: 699

Remainders [Seeking refinement help etc}

Seeking help in smoothing this out... 1. does it mean anything to anyone as it is 2. should the first two "of his father left in him" be changed to "of my father left in me" for clarity or is that obvious. 3. what would you change in structure or content. Thanks Curious. Remainders There is only a t...
by Mightfall
Tue Aug 28, 2012 10:42 pm
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: Insomnia
Replies: 2
Views: 415

Re: Insomnia

Feeling darker than the bedroom that is haunted by the thought That I’m betraying all that matters in pursuit of what does not; Counting shadows on the ceiling that are cast there by the rain, As I lay sleepless in the knowledge that I don’t intend to change. I like the feel and the flow "Counting ...
by Mightfall
Tue Aug 28, 2012 10:40 pm
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: She calls me Verrazano
Replies: 10
Views: 1736

Re: She calls me Verrazano

I'd still really appreciate some constructive criticism. Hi Crooklyn I have some input. This is a fine little poem, compact and effective., Only one thing, Verrazano doesn't mean anything to me ? I looked it up. I think the reason you're not getting any response to your request for critique is that...

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