Search found 83 matches
- Thu Dec 21, 2017 6:41 am
- Forum: Love and Romance
- Topic: Looking for title suggestions and any feedback
- Replies: 5
- Views: 38831
Re: Looking for title suggestions and any feedback
That is it for sure! Thank You
- Sat Dec 09, 2017 3:18 am
- Forum: Love and Romance
- Topic: "The only ones"
- Replies: 1
- Views: 5191
"The only ones"
The only ones...
The first heartbeat
That struck in time with yours
The first breath
That held a bit of you
The first tear
That salted your soft skin
The first laugh
That fell upon your ears
The only ones
That will have mattered
The first heartbeat
That struck in time with yours
The first breath
That held a bit of you
The first tear
That salted your soft skin
The first laugh
That fell upon your ears
The only ones
That will have mattered
- Sat Dec 09, 2017 3:15 am
- Forum: Love and Romance
- Topic: No reason - Lyrics
- Replies: 3
- Views: 7131
Re: No reason
Wouldn't even tweak one syllable in fact.
- Sat Dec 09, 2017 3:13 am
- Forum: Love and Romance
- Topic: No reason - Lyrics
- Replies: 3
- Views: 7131
Re: No reason
Oh, you did post it.
This is beautiful!
This is beautiful!
- Sat Dec 09, 2017 3:12 am
- Forum: Love and Romance
- Topic: Looking for title suggestions and any feedback
- Replies: 5
- Views: 38831
Re: Looking for title suggestions and any feedback
Reverbaration is the right concept but I feel like the wrong voice
What about "Resonate"?
What about "Resonate"?
- Sat Dec 09, 2017 3:09 am
- Forum: Love and Romance
- Topic: Looking for title suggestions and any feedback
- Replies: 5
- Views: 38831
Re: Looking for title suggestions and any feedback
Hi, thank you so much for your feedback
This inspired you to write, that is so... flattering? Did you share it?
This inspired you to write, that is so... flattering? Did you share it?
- Sun Dec 03, 2017 11:08 pm
- Forum: General Poetry
- Topic: Round three, fight!
- Replies: 0
- Views: 7565
Round three, fight!
Round three, fight!
Is that your best shot?
I didn’t beg to be hit,
But I’m your whipping post,
Until your arms are tired
Until you rage is assuaged,
Or your heart lets go,
and reaches out again
For a bipolar embrace
Is that your best shot?
I didn’t beg to be hit,
But I’m your whipping post,
Until your arms are tired
Until you rage is assuaged,
Or your heart lets go,
and reaches out again
For a bipolar embrace
- Tue Nov 28, 2017 4:42 pm
- Forum: Love and Romance
- Topic: Looking for title suggestions and any feedback
- Replies: 5
- Views: 38831
Looking for title suggestions and any feedback
Come inside this poem I weave with my embrace my fingers in your hair And breath upon your face [Alternative lines] {Thoughts?] Your breath upon my face Your breath touching my face Your breath brushes my face Lead me inside the songs In rhythm with your heart And too that sound I'll dance Long afte...
- Sun Nov 26, 2017 9:47 pm
- Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
- Topic: Group Help, Hammering at another song
- Replies: 2
- Views: 6352
Re: Group Help, Hammering at another song
New form, talking to an empty hall here I think.... Winning at defeat When did you first learn There’s no such place as home, and the warmest embraces Rarely comes for another round When did you first fall To a swinging loving first While no one noticed That you stood right up again When did you fi...
- Thu Nov 23, 2017 7:58 am
- Forum: General Poetry
- Topic: The Price
- Replies: 0
- Views: 7367
The Price
For unconditional love
For unrelenting joy
For loyalty beyond dream
For never being alone
There is a price.
Muzzles gray then white,
Runs become walks,
And eyes blur,
Both theirs, and ours.
Shore up your heart,
Brace your whole soul
Know the only heaven,
Is wherever they next go
For unrelenting joy
For loyalty beyond dream
For never being alone
There is a price.
Muzzles gray then white,
Runs become walks,
And eyes blur,
Both theirs, and ours.
Shore up your heart,
Brace your whole soul
Know the only heaven,
Is wherever they next go
- Thu Nov 23, 2017 7:58 am
- Forum: General Poetry
- Topic: The Price
- Replies: 0
- Views: 6819
The Price
For unconditional love
For unrelenting joy
For loyalty beyond dream
For never being alone
There is a price.
Muzzles gray then white,
Runs become walks,
And eyes blur,
Both theirs, and ours.
Shore up your heart,
Brace your whole soul
Know the only heaven,
Is wherever they next go
For unrelenting joy
For loyalty beyond dream
For never being alone
There is a price.
Muzzles gray then white,
Runs become walks,
And eyes blur,
Both theirs, and ours.
Shore up your heart,
Brace your whole soul
Know the only heaven,
Is wherever they next go
- Thu Nov 23, 2017 12:44 am
- Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
- Topic: Group Help, Hammering at another song
- Replies: 2
- Views: 6352
Group Help, Hammering at another song
I am looking to 1. Strengthen images 2. Improve words 3. Improve story flow Also if you agree with me that it feels juvenile, you can say it without hurting my feelings. I know you don't do songs much here but this one should be (and pretty much is) 5, 6, 5, 6, 5, 8 with some leeway for either or wo...
- Mon Nov 13, 2017 7:59 pm
- Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
- Topic: Looking to improve this song for an excericise
- Replies: 5
- Views: 11506
Re: Looking to improve this song for an excericise
Someone who knows who Nick Cave, awesome hehe.
Thank you for your wonderful suggestions.
Now I just have to find some way to take a sledge hammer to the timing
Thank you for your wonderful suggestions.
Now I just have to find some way to take a sledge hammer to the timing
- Mon Nov 13, 2017 5:33 am
- Forum: Love and Romance
- Topic: Sleep Apnea (Divine Intervention)
- Replies: 5
- Views: 8325
Re: Sleep Apnea (Divine Intervention)
I love it and the new title is great
- Mon Nov 13, 2017 4:27 am
- Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
- Topic: Looking to improve this song for an excericise
- Replies: 5
- Views: 11506
Looking to improve this song for an excericise
I needs to be smoother 4,5,6 and any wording improvement. Any community suggestions are welcome. It is a dark hard piano piece, or will be when the timing is right lol. Content If my next breath and my last breath each Somehow crossed your lips If my next heartbeat and my last were each In perfect s...