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by Mightfall
Thu Dec 21, 2017 6:41 am
Forum: Love and Romance
Topic: Looking for title suggestions and any feedback
Replies: 5
Views: 90

Re: Looking for title suggestions and any feedback

That is it for sure! Thank You
by Mightfall
Sat Dec 09, 2017 3:18 am
Forum: Love and Romance
Topic: "The only ones"
Replies: 1
Views: 37

"The only ones"

The only ones...

The first heartbeat
That struck in time with yours
The first breath
That held a bit of you
The first tear
That salted your soft skin
The first laugh
That fell upon your ears

The only ones
That will have mattered
by Mightfall
Sat Dec 09, 2017 3:15 am
Forum: Love and Romance
Topic: No reason - Lyrics
Replies: 3
Views: 71

Re: No reason

Wouldn't even tweak one syllable in fact.
by Mightfall
Sat Dec 09, 2017 3:13 am
Forum: Love and Romance
Topic: No reason - Lyrics
Replies: 3
Views: 71

Re: No reason

Oh, you did post it.

This is beautiful!
by Mightfall
Sat Dec 09, 2017 3:12 am
Forum: Love and Romance
Topic: Looking for title suggestions and any feedback
Replies: 5
Views: 90

Re: Looking for title suggestions and any feedback

Reverbaration is the right concept but I feel like the wrong voice

What about "Resonate"?
by Mightfall
Sat Dec 09, 2017 3:09 am
Forum: Love and Romance
Topic: Looking for title suggestions and any feedback
Replies: 5
Views: 90

Re: Looking for title suggestions and any feedback

Hi, thank you so much for your feedback

This inspired you to write, that is so... flattering? Did you share it?
by Mightfall
Sun Dec 03, 2017 11:08 pm
Forum: General Poetry
Topic: Round three, fight!
Replies: 0
Views: 73

Round three, fight!

Round three, fight!

Is that your best shot?
I didn’t beg to be hit,
But I’m your whipping post,
Until your arms are tired
Until you rage is assuaged,
Or your heart lets go,
and reaches out again
For a bipolar embrace
by Mightfall
Tue Nov 28, 2017 4:42 pm
Forum: Love and Romance
Topic: Looking for title suggestions and any feedback
Replies: 5
Views: 90

Looking for title suggestions and any feedback

Come inside this poem I weave with my embrace my fingers in your hair And breath upon your face [Alternative lines] {Thoughts?] Your breath upon my face Your breath touching my face Your breath brushes my face Lead me inside the songs In rhythm with your heart And too that sound I'll dance Long afte...
by Mightfall
Sun Nov 26, 2017 9:47 pm
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: Group Help, Hammering at another song
Replies: 2
Views: 105

Re: Group Help, Hammering at another song

New form, talking to an empty hall here I think.... Winning at defeat When did you first learn There’s no such place as home, and the warmest embraces Rarely comes for another round When did you first fall To a swinging loving first While no one noticed That you stood right up again When did you fi...
by Mightfall
Thu Nov 23, 2017 7:58 am
Forum: General Poetry
Topic: The Price
Replies: 0
Views: 75

The Price

For unconditional love
For unrelenting joy
For loyalty beyond dream
For never being alone


There is a price.


Muzzles gray then white,
Runs become walks,
And eyes blur,
Both theirs, and ours.
Shore up your heart,
Brace your whole soul

Know the only heaven,
Is wherever they next go
by Mightfall
Thu Nov 23, 2017 7:58 am
Forum: General Poetry
Topic: The Price
Replies: 0
Views: 59

The Price

For unconditional love
For unrelenting joy
For loyalty beyond dream
For never being alone


There is a price.


Muzzles gray then white,
Runs become walks,
And eyes blur,
Both theirs, and ours.
Shore up your heart,
Brace your whole soul

Know the only heaven,
Is wherever they next go
by Mightfall
Thu Nov 23, 2017 12:44 am
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: Group Help, Hammering at another song
Replies: 2
Views: 105

Group Help, Hammering at another song

I am looking to 1. Strengthen images 2. Improve words 3. Improve story flow Also if you agree with me that it feels juvenile, you can say it without hurting my feelings. I know you don't do songs much here but this one should be (and pretty much is) 5, 6, 5, 6, 5, 8 with some leeway for either or wo...
by Mightfall
Mon Nov 13, 2017 7:59 pm
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: Looking to improve this song for an excericise
Replies: 5
Views: 151

Re: Looking to improve this song for an excericise

Someone who knows who Nick Cave, awesome hehe.

Thank you for your wonderful suggestions.

Now I just have to find some way to take a sledge hammer to the timing
by Mightfall
Mon Nov 13, 2017 5:33 am
Forum: Love and Romance
Topic: Sleep Apnea (Divine Intervention)
Replies: 5
Views: 144

Re: Sleep Apnea (Divine Intervention)

I love it and the new title is great
by Mightfall
Mon Nov 13, 2017 4:27 am
Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
Topic: Looking to improve this song for an excericise
Replies: 5
Views: 151

Looking to improve this song for an excericise

I needs to be smoother 4,5,6 and any wording improvement. Any community suggestions are welcome. It is a dark hard piano piece, or will be when the timing is right lol. Content If my next breath and my last breath each Somehow crossed your lips If my next heartbeat and my last were each In perfect s...

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