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Thanks Heienzes, I think you are the only one who reads my posts, I wonder why?
- Sat Nov 22, 2008 11:35 am
- Forum: Workshop/Critiques Wanted
- Topic: Boy Soldiers
- Replies: 8
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There they stood, with a confident gait. The uniforms crisp and clean, the swastika gleaming. Standing at attention, they face their king. These are not men, but merely boys. Boys that were groomed at their birth, to become perfect little soldiers. Taught to be cruel and treat everyone differently....
Sometimes I have nothing to say instead the words, just a silent sight [suggest: instead of words, sincere sighs] you do mean sighs and not sight? sometimes it´s the laugh, the smile your charm, doing something inside. I find the phrasing somewhat akward and although I sense the direction of this po...
I hadn't even notied it was about 'unwanted flowers' until Heinzs mentioned it in his post. I started out looking for weaknesses in the poem itself but then as I read I recognised the scences so familiar to me. I became engrossed and enjoyed the seasons and the effort and love one feels for ones gar...