Poetry Pages

Well well, talented lady you are!! I honestly would not dare to suggest that you change anything. Your poem captured me from the start, and kept me in the trance of your words.... You take words and make them feel for you, and like eating ice cream (my analogy for the moment) your words capture me i...

Hi again, I "just" noticed the forum for published books, so I put it there, however the homemade version is cuter, cheaper and more apealing. Seems people like smaller sized books for gifts, fits in a purse, easy to handle, and it's cuter. My email is Mjarabrab@aol.com if you 'd like to email. than...

Book Title Author: Real Name (forum name)author (me) Barbara Martin , on here I"m Mjarabrab Description of book goes here. An original collection of inspiring messages with nature photos taken by myself To purchase this book please visit:Amazon.com this was published through Xlibirs, however I have...

Hi Jadynara, thank you for your comment and interest! Here's what I did - Had heard about "self publishing" and gave it a try, was not happy with the result, because I have full color photos to go with each poem, and the only size they had was 8 x 11. I completed the process anyway, and it's on Amaz...

Just my two cents here, but this Uka person, instead of these short, seemingly (to me) condecending remarks (which to me are not beneficial to a writer) please a)offer what you do like about it (read the rules about commenting for this site)b) offer something for the writer to improve upon and inste...

Hi- I am so glad that I did not offend you in any way. I am new here, and sometimes writers are so horribly defensive, I just "say it like it is" to learn, and understand about writing. I believe so that writing is uniquely personal, and to tag a style a certain,, well, style, hampers the very creat...

I actually forgot to ask you, if this work in "prose" than your further comment is that it lacks the spontanaity a poem should have, so if it's not a poem than that doesn't matter, right? The theme of this is that solitude is a time of reflection, that's all. Simple, not a poem, so, is it ok as pros...

Hi- you know I actually don't mind at all your remarks, because I have no training at all! The only thing I can tell you is, I wrote a poetry book with each poem with each nature shot I took myself, in a very simple writing style, who knows what to call it, poetry, prose,,,dosen't matter to me But w...

Well I will share with you my thoughts on your pieces, first the third and last. This made the most sense to me, however all three seem to be written with sort of "free word association" style to them. I truly do not understand the meanings here, or if you intended them to be rambling, wandering los...

The thunder of your heart beat wakes me As I lay with closed eyes Letting my cheek rest against your thigh And the warm embrace of perfection Washes over us Open my eyes to find The waves crashing against the breakers As I grip tight the drift wood worn smooth The sand sucking me under While the sun...

I see a lot of very old poems being brought up for more attention, not sure why, but this one is a very simple, easy to read, but a very narrow view and generalization of the world as a whole. I think the "forest through the trees" mindset could be a thought here, as for the view of the writer, may ...

Tell me O’ Seeker About the journey ahead And what vision drives the stars And which shepherd points the way To the dwelling where I must stay The peace lit by the fire of the “ghats” Rise with the dust to fall again Knowing in dust I must rest In the grove of time; Faith enriching the land Where a ...

Hi, my first comment for your work is that it's easy to read, and I like your simple style. It is however, very depressing for someone like me to read, for I see life as completely the opposite, for I know we can empower ourselves to create our own lives, not to be powerless and allow what happens t...

Hi Beejay, thank you for your comments, however, just wanted to share my message here in this,, I guess you see "the fallen has arrisen" which is interesting, but the leaf represents life, saying not to grieve or cry, or shed tears over us to rot, because we are just a leaf or life... it's celebrati...

Hi Berkay, thank you for your review, I agree that the ending is awkward, and I am in now way a trained writer, each line has five counts to them or "beats" I guess you could call it, and even though each line matches in that way, it still is awkward, I left it this way for now, but open to change.....